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Paul J Penton – Songwriter
“Release the Muse”
Case Study Another Perfect Morning part 3
First lyric draft – hear the current draft here … http://pauljpenton.com/demos
Not exactly sure what I did next, but probably a bit of brainstorming- seeing if I could find connections etc- but certainly the ‘autumn mornings biting’ and the ‘shadows stretching ’til noon’ idea wanted to come together. Here’s a first lyric draft… not quite in the order or structure I have arrived at. I note that the first section of verse1 one is longer than my final idea and the second part of verse one was not developed yet…..[as it was by the time I did the first demo] it was missing a third line to make the arrival at line four more pronounced. I also note I did not repeat the title line in line 3 of the chorus- these things were added for emphasis in later drafts..
the rough verse structure then is
A A A B
C C C B
Here’s my first post ‘kitchen table’ recording – I used a shuffle beat from Digidesign’s ‘strike’ drum program to get the feel right….there are two acoustic guitars playing the same harmony on different positions on the guitar.
Perfect morning APril-09
Another perfect morning -April 09
Autumn mornings start to bite
have to pull those covers tight
it’s really been a chilly night
gotta bring you in even closer —–
it might be a nasty winter
shadows seem to stretch to noon
got to get to work real soon
but I – don’t want to leave you
it’s another perfect morning
for sitting on the verandah
watching all the world go by
thinking I don’t want to die
it don’t get better than this
another perfect morning
When you find new love again
and you can’t believe it’s happenin’
pinch your cheeks and poke your chin
to remind you tha it’s real
Some people search all their lives
for what we got I realise
we’re lucki-er than other guys
and this might last for-ever-
like the way it feels
CH
The sky is blue and the sea is green
and I’m getting high on brown caffeine
staring at a perfect scene
out of the window
- I don’t want o go
to another crazy office day
with telephones that buzz away
computer screens that turn to grey
because I can’t see you
CH
more soon…..